The "Post Your Poem" Thread

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The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« on: March 20, 2007, 07:31:42 PM »
"Despair Sighted, For Death Is Thy Familiar"

I keep pressing a compress over the emotion,
but the stitches keep ripping open
Open mouths, fangs agape
my fury has a soul to rape
and against some rusted nails it will scrape
killing God with a child-like grin

Open are the sores of men
on and off again we stand up and spin
this globe of wandering, translucent disease
the flies are fucking their own larva as they please

Stupid pretentious verse of nothing
little trumpets blaring something
a meritless item no one wants to hear
beating on an unconscious queer

Seer laying on the floor
bones apart, splattered in gore
A whore, whose name is "no thank you"
we sat her upright and sneezed out her rapture

Deletion comes on the morning's grin
apart from love I rot again
screaming my screams to a deaf world
a dead god denied of his string of pearls
donkey punched and sodomized by the masses,
a mongoloidal tidal wave of excess and bleeding iconography

Tormented at conception
and
asunder we rip the muses
Fuses
counting down to the next front page addition of space
where once a meatbag blocked our view of hell

Sense was made on the first line
and now the demons of madness shall dine
upon wings made from the skins of dogs
impaling precision onto rotting logs

Erase
Rebuke
This poem is useless
So is everything else

(note: title is taken from a known phrase spoken by Beholders, from d&d canon)
My problem with his ideas is that it is a ridiculous thing.

Genius. PURE, undiluted genius.

Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #1 on: March 20, 2007, 07:48:17 PM »
EMOS!


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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #2 on: March 20, 2007, 08:18:57 PM »
EMOS!



Never did an image macro fit a thread the LEAST.
My problem with his ideas is that it is a ridiculous thing.

Genius. PURE, undiluted genius.

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #3 on: March 20, 2007, 08:19:52 PM »
"Tom, the Pod Person"

Cavorting about,
between exhalations and snarls,
the monster snorts derisively,
tasting the flat air for his desire.

He wants their pretty little flat heads.
Removed as they sleep in their flat burning beds.
He will never be rid of his need.
He must be fed.

Hi, my name is Tom.
My problem with his ideas is that it is a ridiculous thing.

Genius. PURE, undiluted genius.

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #4 on: March 20, 2007, 08:29:12 PM »
Nomad is a superhero.

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« Reply #5 on: March 20, 2007, 08:30:41 PM »

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #6 on: March 21, 2007, 12:56:27 AM »
I'll try a limerick:

I once knew a bard who was good with a lute,
And played quite well, as well, on his flute
He'd play for his gold,
For young and for old,
He'd sit down a while, and a tune he would toot.

;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #7 on: March 21, 2007, 01:08:32 AM »
The Broken Haiku

Once I tried to write
A haiku which fit the form.
It seems I failed.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #8 on: March 21, 2007, 01:21:40 AM »
The Broken Haiku

Once I tried to write
A haiku which fit the form.
It seems I failed.

Holy carp you rock. =P
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #9 on: March 21, 2007, 01:27:16 AM »
Why thank you.
I do try.=D
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #10 on: March 21, 2007, 01:30:48 AM »
Lame. You shouldn't have to try to be too cool for school.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #11 on: March 22, 2007, 03:15:27 AM »
No one is too cool for school. School is the coolest.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #12 on: March 22, 2007, 03:54:12 AM »
I'm cooler than school, but still atend it to make it feel better.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #13 on: March 22, 2007, 04:04:41 AM »
You can't be cooler than school.
Cool is the very definition of school.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #14 on: March 22, 2007, 06:30:16 AM »
And? Sweet is the very definition of sugar, and I can be much sweeter than that if I wish.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #15 on: March 22, 2007, 06:34:07 AM »
Haiku: Pain

I gave you my heart
you gave me yours forever,
now you've caused me pain


Haiku: Puppet

Moving for my child,
I reach every demand.
I wish I could think.


Haiku: Summer

The winter snows gone,
the spring showers at an end,
Summer is my love.


Haiku: Sun

Sun shining brightly,
Who will live and who will die?
In your powerful light



......I did those when I should have been paying attention in History today.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #16 on: March 22, 2007, 06:54:43 AM »
I don't even know how to do haikus. I don't wanna bother finding out either.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #17 on: March 22, 2007, 12:45:32 PM »
they're not entirely correct [mine] but it's not really that hard... just 5 syllables every line, 3 lines long.
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I happen to like GG.
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I never thought in my life I'd write the sentence "I thought they were caught in a bipolar geodesic?"

Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #18 on: March 22, 2007, 12:49:19 PM »
they're not entirely correct [mine] but it's not really that hard... just 5 syllables every line, 3 lines long.

5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables

It's very fucking easy.

The water gazes
with moonlit splashes breaking
as the rain comes down
ah.

Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #19 on: March 22, 2007, 12:50:19 PM »
Shade

Black is what we'd say
is not a color,
but a shade.
For the fools who call it color,
I feel tonight,
I'll kill another.
Because if I hear,
another fool who compares
black to red,
or blue to black,
I'll tear their spine out
upon a rack.
ah.

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #20 on: March 22, 2007, 01:02:27 PM »
"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried.


He would not listen to his mother,
his sister or best friend
He only heard the other:
"Defend the vaterland"

"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried
his brown shirt new and chic,
he ran to battle eyes open wide,
blind with the fog of rhetoric.

He saw them falling one by one
the young men and the old
this dirty war could not be won
his mother had foretold.

He fell and whimpered for a while
lips exhaling a last "Sieg Heil"
Quote from: TheEngineer
I happen to like GG.
Quote from: Z, the Enlightened.
I never thought in my life I'd write the sentence "I thought they were caught in a bipolar geodesic?"

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #21 on: March 22, 2007, 02:07:43 PM »
o yah, SprinkZ is TEH BEST POET EVAR.  According to him.  So watch out for him.
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #22 on: March 22, 2007, 04:49:21 PM »
I made four poems:

"The Non-commitment Group Meeting"






"The Emperor's New Haiku"








"Hollow Man"








"Sam Fisher"















« Last Edit: March 22, 2007, 04:53:18 PM by unclegravy »
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« Reply #23 on: March 22, 2007, 09:16:08 PM »
o yah, SprinkZ is TEH BEST POET EVAR.  According to him.  So watch out for him.

Nope.
ah.

Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #24 on: March 22, 2007, 09:31:10 PM »
"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried.


He would not listen to his mother,
his sister or best friend
He only heard the other:
"Defend the vaterland"

"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried
his brown shirt new and chic,
he ran to battle eyes open wide,
blind with the fog of rhetoric.

He saw them falling one by one
the young men and the old
this dirty war could not be won
his mother had foretold.

He fell and whimpered for a while
lips exhaling a last "Sieg Heil"

This has massive potential. I just think it needs a bit more imagery, and perhaps set in a first-person perspective. It would be easier to get into this youth's brain-washed head.
ah.

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #25 on: March 23, 2007, 01:37:39 AM »
I made four poems:

"The Non-commitment Group Meeting"






"The Emperor's New Haiku"








"Hollow Man"








"Sam Fisher"


















OMGLOLOLOLOLROFLMAO!!!
Seriously, that was pretty fucking funny ;D ;D
« Last Edit: March 23, 2007, 03:33:52 AM by Wendigo »
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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #26 on: March 23, 2007, 03:06:22 AM »
"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried.


He would not listen to his mother,
his sister or best friend
He only heard the other:
"Defend the vaterland"

"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried
his brown shirt new and chic,
he ran to battle eyes open wide,
blind with the fog of rhetoric.

He saw them falling one by one
the young men and the old
this dirty war could not be won
his mother had foretold.

He fell and whimpered for a while
lips exhaling a last "Sieg Heil"

This has massive potential. I just think it needs a bit more imagery, and perhaps set in a first-person perspective. It would be easier to get into this youth's brain-washed head.
oh thanks. I found it difficult cause we had to write a sonnet in the stle of Tony Harrison for English. ;D I agree that it lacks imagery perhaps, but since it was a sonnet, I had limited rhythm and number of lines. Might adapt it to make it a longer poem sometime when I have the time..
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I happen to like GG.
Quote from: Z, the Enlightened.
I never thought in my life I'd write the sentence "I thought they were caught in a bipolar geodesic?"

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #27 on: March 23, 2007, 06:06:47 AM »
OMGLOLOLOLOLROFLMAO!!!
Seriously, that was pretty fucking funny ;D ;D
Glad someone liked it.:P
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« Reply #28 on: March 23, 2007, 07:18:49 AM »
"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried.


He would not listen to his mother,
his sister or best friend
He only heard the other:
"Defend the vaterland"

"Heil Hitler" the Fuhrer's youth cried
his brown shirt new and chic,
he ran to battle eyes open wide,
blind with the fog of rhetoric.

He saw them falling one by one
the young men and the old
this dirty war could not be won
his mother had foretold.

He fell and whimpered for a while
lips exhaling a last "Sieg Heil"

This has massive potential. I just think it needs a bit more imagery, and perhaps set in a first-person perspective. It would be easier to get into this youth's brain-washed head.
oh thanks. I found it difficult cause we had to write a sonnet in the stle of Tony Harrison for English. ;D I agree that it lacks imagery perhaps, but since it was a sonnet, I had limited rhythm and number of lines. Might adapt it to make it a longer poem sometime when I have the time..

Well the sonnet is frequently seen as presenting a problem or an argument, and then solving it in the last two lines (frequently the heroic couplet). I think for a sonnet it's quite good, but you could take this idea of a mindless shell youth and turn it into a great first-person perspective poem about it. I think that might work fantastically.

The rhythm is pretty good, but sometimes the meter skips out, but that's all right.
ah.

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Re: The "Post Your Poem" Thread
« Reply #29 on: March 29, 2007, 04:37:46 AM »
"Sphere of No Form"

Cold and recalcitrant
the shadows muse of darker mornings
long since secluded in basements of memories
We stood and praised the arching corners
of a love denied and fastened to burning skins
Reprints came out in sets of fifty
and the surplus we used as bandages on our open stomachs

Our form
our function
has been lost to the ages
on pages
whose lettering is a font only dogs can read
Plead
and be damned for half the purchase price of our competitor

Silence
and a god is denied
Reprisal
and a skin is shed for something wetter, more malformed

Malicious was the twilight of our youth
as the age of a thousand losses
losses which own real estate in hell
became the choir of the damned
singing to deaf deities with no pants on their cloven-footed legs

The seasons came and went
and the sphere of no form cast its magic
and upon our hands the scars from war
clinging like leeches in the reddened fleshes
were silent witness to our own self destruction
« Last Edit: March 29, 2007, 04:40:13 AM by midnight »
My problem with his ideas is that it is a ridiculous thing.

Genius. PURE, undiluted genius.